A Wonder Horse - Part 1

by ranchgirl

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I walked into the stable calling to my sister "Let's go see the baby."

We ran through the barn until we came to the stall. There was a chestnut baby laying there. It had huge, brown eyes and the tiniest horse nostrils ever.

Me and my sister stood there in awe looking at the wonder. That's it! Wonder! I looked at the baby then, I noticed that there was a sign on the door.

"NEED FOR NAME FOR THE CHESTNUT BABY"


I told my sister "I'm going to call the owner."

My sister looked up, surprised that I have the courage to call with I never have because I was always the shy one in the family, the one being called names. Now I had the courage, the courage to stand up for the foal.

The mother of the foal, Regi came over. I patted her and said "I have a name for your little one."


That's when the dream came alive...

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This is partly a true story. Please comment for more that means that people are reading it. I think that when nobody comments it means that nobody likes it or doesn't bother to read it.

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A Wonder Horse - Part 2

by ranchgirl

Please comment if you like. Thanks for the comments on the last part. I actually thought I would only get 1 or 2 comments but okay there were thousands!
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I dialed the number on the ranch phone. Someone picked up and said "Hello." His voice was tough and it kinda made me flinch.

I nodded at my sister. She gave me thumbs up.

"Uh, hi. This is Dakota Walker and I read the sign and I thought that maybe the horse should be called Wonder."

"Okay, thank you for calling I'll think about it." He hung up and I put the phone up.

"Sooooo, how did it go?" My sister asked.

"It was okay, I just think he doesn't like the name because he said he'll think about it and he wasn't even surprised or anything."

I walked back to the foal.

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A Wonder Horse - Part 3

by ranchgirl

Sorry, you guys, that it took me forever to post this, but when I read all the comments I thought that you would be mad if I didn't post it soon enough. So here you go.
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The very next day I ran back to the stalls. To my surprise, there was a new sign.

THE NAME OF THE FOAL IS: WONDER!(I would like to thank my horse, Regi for giving me well... A WONDER!!!!!!! and to the little girl who gave me the name)

"Wow!" I thought, "That was a surprise!"

I stared into the foal's eyes. Noticing the attention, she looked up. She walked toward me. I held out my hand and she sniffed it. I thought she was the most beautiful creature I have ever seen.

Her mom, Regi was beautiful because the first time I saw Wonder. She looked at me and nudged her baby as if to say look here... at my baby. I knew Regi would let me touch Wonder.

I knew that Wonder was going to become a wonderful horse. My mom told me that when she was sixteen. She and her sister would be able to bring out the mares and foals. I wondered if I was going to be able to do that.