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Oct 07, 2012
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by: Anonymous

more please?
May 14, 2012
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by: Doree

Thanks for the comments!! @Lucinda: Oh I'm sorry if it seems that way!! I made this story a long time ago, just wanted to share it now. I haven't read your story about a horse been stolen, but I will try and find it and read it !!
May 11, 2012
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by: lucinda

YES! YEAH! OH AWESOME WOOOOOOOOO! but because it's a horse being horse-napped it's kind of a copy of one of my story not much like it but the fact that the horse was horse-napped..... oh well still great.
May 11, 2012
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by: horseluver4evernever

i love your story. your really talented. please keep writing!
May 11, 2012
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by: Unicorn

You're incredibly talented! :-) Your stories are great - I like them all. I haven't read "A Christmas Miracle" (not yet!), but I can easily see what's going on here, which is very difficult to pull off - well done.
Like most people who write a lot, you've picked up a few "crutches" - words or phrases you tend to overuse (I have gazillions). Watch out for "down cast", and when describing your main character, try to find a way other than putting them in front of a mirror and watching them put on an outfit (you did the same thing in "Hope"; it works, but don't overuse it). It's really, really, really hard to describe main characters without using a mirror, and I don't know how to do it, but perhaps you could come up with something :-)
Your description of other characters is brilliant. You give us just a handful of fresh, different details, so I can instantly picture them in my head.
All in all, AWESOME. Please write more soon!

Unicorn

writer of:
El Cheapo Parts 1-4
www.horsecrazygirls.com/el-cheapo-part-i.html

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