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May 09, 2012
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great job
by: Horseluver4evernever

GOOD JOB!!!! i luv your story. maybe for a name you could do silver dime.

Sep 04, 2011
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NOW!!
by: Anonymous

Write more please I can't survive on just this I have to have more!!! :) I crack myself up!! Hehehehehe

Aug 29, 2011
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This is great!
by: Shine

I absolutely agree with Unicorn, I have to hear more! Please continue. Dime has always been a favorite name of mine for horses. Oh yea, love the characters.

Aug 01, 2011
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Hi Canadian :)
by: Unicorn

Replying late, I know, sorry! A good way to pick up spelling and grammar mistakes is to rewrite. Write the story, then put it away for a while - for short stories, generally two to four weeks. Come back afterwards, read it through, and fix the problems. It works for me.
Keep writing, please. I really, really enjoyed this story!

Unicorn
writer of:
"More than a Myth" Into and Parts 1 - 3

Jul 03, 2011
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to unicorn
by: Anonymous

kendra speaks the first line and laura speaks the second one.

Jul 03, 2011
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to unicorn
by: Author

I don't at all mind you calling me Canadian. Anyway, I'm aware that I do have some grammatical and spelling errors. unfortunately I didn't pick them up before I posted the story.

sorry for the confusion.

Jun 22, 2011
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cool
by: Anonymous

cool story! :)

Jun 21, 2011
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Hi Canadian (hope you don't mind me calling you that!)
by: Unicorn

Excellent story - strong plot, strong characters. Dime is a lovely name for a grey horse. You have me hooked, and I've just GOT to hear more!
Just watch out when you're writing dialogue, for confusing the reader. This section:

"I'll be there cheering for you." Laura looked at Kendra curiously.

"Why don't you do the 3'6 jumper?" Kendra looked at her friend trying to smile.

... is particularly tricky. I keep thinking that Laura speaks the first line and Kendra speaks the second one. It's easy to clear up - just drop in a few paragraph breaks and delete a few other paragraph breaks and voila, it's fixed.
Okay, I'll stop preaching. All round, a great story and I'm dying to hear more!

Jun 21, 2011
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hoh
by: Amethyst

write more

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